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读后续写 When Mom said we had to give away Sam, I didn’t say a word. I just picked

英语作文范文 03-30
读后续写(满分25分)
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When Mom said we had to give away Sam, I didn’t say a word. I just picked up Sam and walked out to the shed (棚) that used to be Dads workshop.
What Mom said to me wasn’t a surprise. I saw it coming.
My name is Nathan. Sam is my cat. Not long before Dad died, he found Sam behind his store. No one wanted a little cat, so Dad brought him home. Sam is black, with wise eyes and big ears. But all most people notice is his big white feet.
“Meow?”
Sam knows I’m upset. I wonder if I could explain to Sam about Anna. She’s my younger stepsister (继妹), and if it weren’t for her, I could keep Sam. But I don’t explain, and Sam couldn’t understand his situation. He likes to run up and down in the shed’s dusty sunlight.
No one uses the shed now except our elder neighbors, Mr. Sims and Mr. Irvin. They make wind chimes (风铃) to sell at the market. Dad used to help them. I grew up loving the sounds that filled our shed. Mom says people love those chimes because their music is mixed with laughter.
I wonder how things are going to change now that I have a stepsister. Last week we had to take Anna to the hospital quickly. She couldn’t breathe. Mom thinks it was because Sam slept in her room. Anna is allergic (过敏的) to cats. Mom told me that Sam had to be sent away. She asked me who was more important, Sam or Anna. I couldn’t answer.
“Isn’t there anything else we can do?” I ask. I look at Sam. Sam is playing with things left over from the wind chimes. When he hits metal against metal, it rings loudly. Sam is happy. But I’m not.
注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语
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Then, I remember Anna on the way to the hospital, her face frightened and pale.
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In the end, our neighbors Mr. Sims and Mr. Irvin take in Sam, so Sam gets two homes.
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【答案】Paragraph 1:
Then, I remember Anna on the way to the hospital 9 her face frightened and pale. Sam would be OK in a new home, but you can’t just send away a little sister. I guess I know the answer to Mom’s question. I need to be a brother. I should look after and care for my little sister and I can find another way to deal with Sam. Maybe I can talk with my neighbors.
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In the end, our neighbors Mr. Sims and Mr. Irvin take in Sam , so Sam gets two homes. I visit him at both. But I like it best when he is brought to the shed. From my window? I can hear the sounds that go into the making of wind chimes. I hear the laughter. And I hear Sam’s meow.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知,作者有一只猫叫萨姆。由于作者同母异母的妹妹对猫过敏,有一天安娜被送进医院,她无法呼吸。妈妈认为是因为猫睡在她的房间里。所以要求作者把萨姆送走,作者极度不情愿,但是又无计可施。
【详解】续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:然后,我记得安娜在去医院的路上,她的脸吓坏了,脸色苍白……,所以下文应该写做作者的心理描写,为了妹妹的安全,作者理解了妈妈,并意识到必须要把萨姆送走了。第二段开头是:最后,我们的邻居西姆斯先生和欧文先生收留了萨姆,因此萨姆有了两个家。本段应该写问题得到圆满的解决,作者很高兴。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度,我们要熟悉所给划线词语,恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右;续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:the answer to,look after ;care for,deal with等高级词汇;状语从句I like it best when he is brought to the shed. 定语从句I can hear the sounds that go into the making of wind chimes等高级句式。全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外,文章思路清晰、层次分明,上下句转换自然,为文章增色添彩。
 
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