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书面表达假定你是张华,你的美国笔友John得知你校上月举办了首届校园科技节活动,发邮件向你询问相关情况

英语作文范文 05-31
书面表达(满分25)
假定你是张华,你的美国笔友John得知你校上月举办了首届校园科技节活动,发邮件向你询问相关情况。请你回复邮件。内容包括:
1. 活动的目的;
2. 活动的形式,如智能校园创客(maker)大赛,科创成果展等;
3. 你的感受。
注意:1.词数 100 左右;2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
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范文】Dear John,
I am excited to tell you that the first Science and Technology Festival was held in our school last month, which aimed at enriching us students’ school life and promoting the students' awareness of innovation.
There were a variety of activities in the festival, which included Makers on Campus, where participants could show their designs and products, and an exhibition of the students' original inventions, designs and literary works. With the enthusiastic participation and support of all the students, the activity turned out a great success. I was astonished at schoolmates’ creativity and teamwork spirits.
I do hope more activities will be held in my school to provide us with chances to practice our critical thinking and problem-solving abilities.
Yours,
Zhang Ming
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇应用文写作。
【详解】第1步:根据提示可知,本篇为一封电子邮件;假定你是张华,你的美国笔友John得知你校上月举办了首届校园科技节活动,发邮件向你询问相关情况。请你回复邮件。内容包括:1. 活动的目的;2. 活动的形式,如智能校园创客(maker)大赛,科创成果展等;3. 你的感受。
第2步:根据写作要求,确定关键词(组),如:the first Science and Technology Festival(第一届科技节),aim at(目的在于),a variety of(各种各样的);Makers on Campus(校园科创),original inventions(原创发明)等。
第3步:根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步:连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰,保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【点睛】范文内容完整,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式,如I am excited to tell you that the first Science and Technology Festival was held in our school last month运用了宾语从句;With the enthusiastic participation and support of all the students, the activity turned out a great success. I was astonished at schoolmates’ creativity and teamwork spirits.运用了with的复合结构。全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外,文章思路清晰、层次分明,上下句转换自然,为文章增色添彩。
 
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