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写作假定你是李华。你的笔友Helen给你发来电子邮件,询问你在当地历史博物馆当志愿者 的经历

英语作文范文 06-05

【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文,要求考生写一封电子邮件,和朋友分享在当地历史博物馆当志愿者的经历。
【详解】第一步:审题
体裁:应用文
时态:根据提示,时态应一般现在时和一般过去时。
结构:总分法
   总分法指把主题句作为总说,把支持句作为分说,并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求:1. 表明邮件意图
      2. 活动相关
      1)活动经历
      2)活动感受
      3)活动意义
第二步:列提纲 (重点词组)
history museum;volunteer;introduce;visitor;disabled;learn from;play a part in;look forward to
第三步:连词成句
1. I’m writing to you about my experience as a volunteer in the local history museum.
2. I worked as a narrator,introducing the local history and culture to visitors.
3. I helped visitors and provided convenience for disabled.
4. The volunteer experience benefited me a lot.
5 I have learned much knowledge in the museum.
6. Helping others also made me fulfilled.
7. Look forward to your reply.
根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步:连句成篇(衔接词)
1.表文章结构顺序:First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2.表并列补充关系:What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,
3.表转折对比关系:However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that… 
4.表因果关系:Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰,
第五步:润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整,要点全面,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些主从复合句,如:Meanwhile, It gives me an unusual chance to learn from the past, which offers me a new angle to approach problems这句话运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句。as引导的让步状语从句和部分倒装句Tired as I was, the smiles on their faces lit up my day.全文没有中式英语的句式,对非谓语动词的使用非常娴熟,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。
 
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