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The first job I want to take after graduation from college is a doctor. The reasons are as follows.
Firstly, the new coronavirus has brought suffering and misfortune to many people all over the world, which gives me the idea of being a doctor. I hope to contribute to people’s health in the future. Secondly, I am a person who likes to challenge myself. Although it is very hard to study medicine, I like the challenges it brings and make great efforts to study it well. Thirdly, as a doctor, I can eliminate the pain and relieve the discomfort of others, which will bring me a sense of accomplishment.
In summary, being a doctor can realize my dream. I will study hard, enter a good medical university, continue to practice and strive to become an excellent doctor.
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本篇书面表达是一篇征文。你校学生会正开展主题为“The first job I want to take”的英语征文比赛，请你撰文参加。
【详解】这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来。动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，不能遗漏要点：1.离开校园、步入社会后，你想从事的第一份职业是什么；2.你想从事这份职业的原因（可从个人特点、职业价值等方面进行阐述）。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。根据写作要点我们可以初步确定文章可能使用到的词汇和短语及句子有：The first job I want to take after graduation from college is a doctor. The reasons are as follows. the new coronavirus，contribute to people’s health in the future，challenge myself，make great efforts，eliminate the pain and relieve the discomfort of others，a sense of accomplishment，Being a doctor can realize my dream. study hard，enter a good medical university， strive to become an excellent doctor。可以使用的衔接词：1.表文章结构顺序：First of all，Firstly/First，Secondly/Second… And then，Finally，In the end，At last，Above all。2.表并列补充关系：What is more，Besides，Moreover，Furthermore，In addition，as well as，not only…but (also)。通过词汇铺垫，我们就很容易地行文了，文章写完之后要检查文中是否存在拼写或语法错误。
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了主从复合句：Firstly, the new coronavirus has brought suffering and misfortune to many people all over the world, which gives me the idea of being a doctor. Thirdly, as a doctor, I can eliminate the pain and relieve the discomfort of others, which will bring me a sense of accomplishment.这两句话运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句；Although it is very hard to study medicine, I like the challenges it brings and make great efforts to study it well. 这句话运用了although引导的让步状语从句。使用了一些固定词组，如： as follows，contribute to，make great efforts，realize my dream。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。