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书面表达上周末,你和同学参加了一次采摘活动。请你为班级英语角写一篇短文,介绍这次活动,内容包括:

英语作文范文 07-12
书面表达(满分25分)
上周末,你和同学参加了一次采摘活动。请你为班级英语角写一篇短文,介绍这次活动,内容包括:
1. 农场情况;
2. 采摘过程;
3. 个人感受
注意:
1. 词数100左右;
2. 题目已为你写好。
题目:My Weekend
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答案】                                                                                       My Weekend
Last weekend,we took part in a picking activity. We drove from the school, and the farm was about 2 kilometers away from our school. When we arrived at the farm, there are all kinds of animals, green fresh vegetables and fruit trees in the farm. We were divided into two groups. One group was responsible for picking fruits, the other packed up the fruits. Time flying quickly, the activity was over. But it was a meaningful day, when we learn a lot form it. Through this activity, we know how hard the farmers are and how precious the food is. We should treasure the food planted by the farmers.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求学生英语角写一篇关于和同学一起参加采摘活动的短文。
【详解】第一步:审题
体裁:应用文。
时态:根据提示,时态应为一般现在时。
结构:总分法。
要求:
1.农场情况;
2.采摘过程;
3.个人感受
第二步:列提纲(重点短语)
took part in;was responsible for ;a meaningful day;should treasure
第三步:连词成句
1. Last weekend, we took part in a picking activity.
2. One group was responsible for picking fruits the other packed up the fruits.
3. But it was a meaningful day, when we learn a lot form it
4. We should treasure the food planted by the farmers.
根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步:连句成篇
1.表示文章结构顺序:介绍农场;描述采摘过程;个人感受
2.表示并列补充关系:and ;But; Through
第五步:润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整,要点全面,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当,上下文意思连贯。复合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多的高端句式,如定语从句:But it was a meaningful day, when we learn a lot form it.;非谓语动词:We should treasure the food planted by the farmers;时间状语从句:When we arrived at the farm, there are all kinds of animals, green fresh vegetables and fruit trees in the farm. We were divided into two groups…等。文章思路清晰,层次分明,上下句转换自然。为文章增色添彩。
 
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