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应用文写作(满分15分) 假定你是李华,在网上看到美国学生Kate的发帖:

英语作文范文 08-15

应用文写作(满分15分)
假定你是李华,在网上看到美国学生Kate的发帖:


 
Kate

Hi, everyone. Staying at home during the epidemic really bores me. What's worse, for lack of workout, I have put on some weight. Is there anybody who can offer me some advice?

 

Hi, Kate. This is Li Hua from China.
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Don't hesitate to contact me if more help is needed.

请你给Kate回帖,内容包括:
1.读贴后的感受;
2.给出两点建议。
注意:
1.词数80左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3.开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。______________________________________________________________________________________
【答案】Hi. Kate. This is Li Hua from China. I can understand what you are going through, because what troubles you used to trouble me. Therefore, I am willing to give you some advice. I think it's due to the absence of exercise and long hours of sitting around that cause your problems. So the first step is to do some indoor sports that you are interested in, like sit-ups or push-ups. Furthermore, doing some housework is a good choice, which will help you lose weight. If these suggestions work for you, I will be more than delighted. (90词)
Don't hesitate to contact me if more help is needed.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给Kate写一个回帖。
【详解】第一步:明确要求。首先,阅读Kate的帖子:在传染病流行期间,Kate不得不待在家里。由于缺乏锻炼,她的体重增加了一些。要求网友给她一些建议。其次,阅读要求:请你给Kate回帖,内容包括:1.读贴后的感受;2.给出两点建议。
第二步:列关键词。如:go through,used to do,be willing to,due to,the absence of exercise ,be interested in,lose weight等。
第三步:连词成句。根据列出的关键词造句,注意主谓一致,时态语态等语法。
第四步:连句成文。注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,如:Therefore、So、Furthermore等。书写一定要规范清晰,保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【点睛】此范文表达流畅,语言优美,内容全面,符合题目要求。其中值得学习的句型有:名词性从句:I can understand what you are going through, because what troubles you used to trouble me.限定性定语从句:So the first step is to do some indoor sports that you are interested in, like sit-ups or push-ups. 非限定性定语从句:Furthermore, doing some housework is a good choice, which will help you lose weight.

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