书面表达
假定你是高三学生李华，高考前夕,你的美国朋友Jack发来邮件说他被哈佛大学(Harvard University)录取了。请你用英语给他写一封电子邮件，要点包括:
1.表达祝贺;
2.介绍你的情况 ( 想争取考上…，紧张备考, 考试前不自信);
3.寻求建议。
注意: 1.词数不少于100; 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
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【范文】Dear Jack，
I am more than delighted to know that you've been admitted into Harvard University. I am writing to offer you my congratulations on your success.
To be honest, I plan to study at one of China’s top universities when I graduate from senior high school. I have been working hard for this over the past years. However, with the college entrance examination drawing near, I suddenly find myself losing confidence and feeling afraid that my efforts won’t pay off. Have you ever doubted yourself too? I would appreciate it if you could give me some advice on how to deal with my present situation.
I am looking forward to your earliest reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于书信类应用文，要求考生写一封邮件，表达对朋友的祝贺并介绍自己目前的情况寻求建议。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。
结构：三段式。第一段表达祝贺；第二段介绍自己情况并请求建议；第三段寒暄结束。
要求：1.表达祝贺（congratulations）
2. 介绍自己情况并请求建议
1）准备考大学（plan to study; work hard ）
2）目前状态：紧张，不自信（lose confidence and feel afraid）
3）请求建议（give me some advice）
3. 寒暄结束（look forward to）
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
More than+形容词；be admitted to; to be honest; graduate from; pay off; give sb. some advice on sth; look forward to
第三步：连词成句
1. I am more than delighted to know that you've been admitted into Harvard University.
2. To be honest, I plan to study at one of China's top universities when I graduate from senior high school.
3. However, with the college entrance examination drawing near, I suddenly find myself losing confidence and feeling afraid that my efforts won't pay off.
4. I would appreciate it if you could give me some advice on how to deal with my present situation.
5 I am looking forward to your earliest reply.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。
1.作者在范文中使用了主从复合句，如：
1)I am more than delighted to know that you've been admitted into Harvard University.（运用了that引导宾语从句）
2)To be honest, I plan to study at one of China’s top universities when I graduate from senior high school.（运用了when引导时间状语从句）
3)I would appreciate it if you could give me some advice on how to deal with my present situation.（运用了if引导条件状语从句）
2.使用了一些固定词组，如be admitted to; to be honest; graduate from; pay off; give sb. some advice on sth; look forward to等。
全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
假定你是高三学生李华，高考前夕,你的美国朋友Jack发来邮件说他被哈佛大学(Harvard University)录取了。请你用英语给他写一封电子邮件，要点包括:
1.表达祝贺;
2.介绍你的情况 ( 想争取考上…，紧张备考, 考试前不自信);
3.寻求建议。
注意: 1.词数不少于100; 2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【范文】Dear Jack，
I am more than delighted to know that you've been admitted into Harvard University. I am writing to offer you my congratulations on your success.
To be honest, I plan to study at one of China’s top universities when I graduate from senior high school. I have been working hard for this over the past years. However, with the college entrance examination drawing near, I suddenly find myself losing confidence and feeling afraid that my efforts won’t pay off. Have you ever doubted yourself too? I would appreciate it if you could give me some advice on how to deal with my present situation.
I am looking forward to your earliest reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于书信类应用文，要求考生写一封邮件，表达对朋友的祝贺并介绍自己目前的情况寻求建议。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。
结构：三段式。第一段表达祝贺；第二段介绍自己情况并请求建议；第三段寒暄结束。
要求：1.表达祝贺（congratulations）
2. 介绍自己情况并请求建议
1）准备考大学（plan to study; work hard ）
2）目前状态：紧张，不自信（lose confidence and feel afraid）
3）请求建议（give me some advice）
3. 寒暄结束（look forward to）
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
More than+形容词；be admitted to; to be honest; graduate from; pay off; give sb. some advice on sth; look forward to
第三步：连词成句
1. I am more than delighted to know that you've been admitted into Harvard University.
2. To be honest, I plan to study at one of China's top universities when I graduate from senior high school.
3. However, with the college entrance examination drawing near, I suddenly find myself losing confidence and feeling afraid that my efforts won't pay off.
4. I would appreciate it if you could give me some advice on how to deal with my present situation.
5 I am looking forward to your earliest reply.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。
1.作者在范文中使用了主从复合句，如：
1)I am more than delighted to know that you've been admitted into Harvard University.（运用了that引导宾语从句）
2)To be honest, I plan to study at one of China’s top universities when I graduate from senior high school.（运用了when引导时间状语从句）
3)I would appreciate it if you could give me some advice on how to deal with my present situation.（运用了if引导条件状语从句）
2.使用了一些固定词组，如be admitted to; to be honest; graduate from; pay off; give sb. some advice on sth; look forward to等。
全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
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