读后续写 Ali and his younger sister, Zahra, lived with their parents in a poor neighborhood. Their mothe
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Ali and his younger sister, Zahra, lived with their parents in a poor neighborhood. Their mother was very sick and their father was struggling to find a job, and they had only a little money to buy food. As they had not paid the rent for several months, the landlord was very unfriendly to them.
One day, Ali took Zahra's shoes to a shoe repairman to have them fixed, but he lost them on the way home. It wasn't until he got home that he realized he had lost the shoes. He was afraid that his parents would be angry and disappointed, so he begged his sister to keep it secret. Zahra agreed and the two decided to share Ali's running shoes, Zahra's school hours were in the morning, so she would wear them first. After school, she would rush back and give them to Ali. He could then run to his school, which began in the afternoon. Although he ran as fast as he could, Ali often arrived late and was warned by the school.
Ali heard about a long distance race that would be held for the boys in the city. When he learned that the third prize was a new pair of shoes, he decided to take part. He ran home excitedly and promised his sister that he would win the new shoes.
The day of the race arrived. Ali had a strong start, but halfway through the race he began to get tired and his legs began to ache. Getting more and more exhausted, he thought only of Zahra and his promise to her. Dreaming of the new shoes he would win for his sister gave him strength, and he stayed right behind the two fastest runners, determined to finish third. Suddenly, as the finish line drew near, another runner collided （碰撞）with him from behind. Ali crashed to the ground. 注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为120左右；
2 .续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好，不计入总词数。
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Ali looked up and saw the other boys rushing ahead.
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Filled with pleasure, Ali walked home quickly.
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【范文】Ali Looked up and saw the other boys rushing ahead. Refusing to give up, he jumped to his feet and ran as fast as possible. He dashed across the finish line and won the fourth prize. Thinking he would let his sister down, Ali couldn’t help sobbing. Suddenly, he heard the announcement that he won the third prize as the runner who collided with Ali was disqualified for breaking the rule. Holding the shoes tightly during the award ceremony, Ali felt over joyed and relieved.
Filled with pleasure, Ali walked home quickly. On his arrival, Ali found Zahra was waiting outside. Nervous and anxious, Zahra wondered whether her brother had brought her what she was expecting. Excitedly, Ali took the prize out of his bag with his trembling hands. The instant Zahra saw the shoes, her face lit up. Tears of joy welled up in their eyes.
【解析】
【分析】
本文为续写作文。续写作文首先要认真读懂所提供的材料，弄清整篇文章的中心，然后围绕文章中心，联系生活，运用想象，补续事情的发展和故事的结局。人物和事物要与原文保持连续性和一致性，融为一体。续写的文章要有明确的中心，重点要突出，详略要得当。故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。
【详解】本文为读故事续写作文。根据提供的文章开头，续写成文，写出故事的延续。续写文章时要注意，一是根据所提供的文章开头、结尾或其他线索，明确续写的方向和路子。二是续写时，情节的发展要合乎逻辑，人物的思想要前后一致，叙述的语气上也要一致，所续写短文的词数应为120左右。
【点睛】本文能围绕文章的中心，联系生活，运用想象续写的内容非常生动。所写的内容与原文能保持了连续性和一致性，融为一体。续写的内容中心明确，重点突出，详略得当。故事情节的向后延续发展也非常合乎情理。
续写内容中运用了非谓语中动词的ing形式做状语Refusing to give up, he jumped to his feet and ran as fast as possible; Thinking he would let his sister down, Ali couldn’t help sobbing. Holding the shoes tightly during the award ceremony, Ali felt over joyed and relieved。非谓语中的过去分词作状语Filled with pleasure, Ali walked home quickly。文中还运用了许多的复合句，如由that引导的同位从句...he heard the announcement that he won the third prize as the runner；有whether引导的宾语从句Nervous and anxious, Zahra wondered whether her brother had brought her what she was expecting；由the instant引导的时间状语从句The instant Zahra saw the shoes, her face lit up；和由who引导的定语从句...the runner who collided with Ali was disqualified for breaking the rule等，这些语法结构的运用，使得所续写的部分与原文非常的一致。
Ali and his younger sister, Zahra, lived with their parents in a poor neighborhood. Their mother was very sick and their father was struggling to find a job, and they had only a little money to buy food. As they had not paid the rent for several months, the landlord was very unfriendly to them.
One day, Ali took Zahra's shoes to a shoe repairman to have them fixed, but he lost them on the way home. It wasn't until he got home that he realized he had lost the shoes. He was afraid that his parents would be angry and disappointed, so he begged his sister to keep it secret. Zahra agreed and the two decided to share Ali's running shoes, Zahra's school hours were in the morning, so she would wear them first. After school, she would rush back and give them to Ali. He could then run to his school, which began in the afternoon. Although he ran as fast as he could, Ali often arrived late and was warned by the school.
Ali heard about a long distance race that would be held for the boys in the city. When he learned that the third prize was a new pair of shoes, he decided to take part. He ran home excitedly and promised his sister that he would win the new shoes.
The day of the race arrived. Ali had a strong start, but halfway through the race he began to get tired and his legs began to ache. Getting more and more exhausted, he thought only of Zahra and his promise to her. Dreaming of the new shoes he would win for his sister gave him strength, and he stayed right behind the two fastest runners, determined to finish third. Suddenly, as the finish line drew near, another runner collided （碰撞）with him from behind. Ali crashed to the ground. 注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为120左右；
2 .续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Paragraph 1:
Ali looked up and saw the other boys rushing ahead.
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
Filled with pleasure, Ali walked home quickly.
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【范文】Ali Looked up and saw the other boys rushing ahead. Refusing to give up, he jumped to his feet and ran as fast as possible. He dashed across the finish line and won the fourth prize. Thinking he would let his sister down, Ali couldn’t help sobbing. Suddenly, he heard the announcement that he won the third prize as the runner who collided with Ali was disqualified for breaking the rule. Holding the shoes tightly during the award ceremony, Ali felt over joyed and relieved.
Filled with pleasure, Ali walked home quickly. On his arrival, Ali found Zahra was waiting outside. Nervous and anxious, Zahra wondered whether her brother had brought her what she was expecting. Excitedly, Ali took the prize out of his bag with his trembling hands. The instant Zahra saw the shoes, her face lit up. Tears of joy welled up in their eyes.
【解析】
【分析】
本文为续写作文。续写作文首先要认真读懂所提供的材料，弄清整篇文章的中心，然后围绕文章中心，联系生活，运用想象，补续事情的发展和故事的结局。人物和事物要与原文保持连续性和一致性，融为一体。续写的文章要有明确的中心，重点要突出，详略要得当。故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。
【详解】本文为读故事续写作文。根据提供的文章开头，续写成文，写出故事的延续。续写文章时要注意，一是根据所提供的文章开头、结尾或其他线索，明确续写的方向和路子。二是续写时，情节的发展要合乎逻辑，人物的思想要前后一致，叙述的语气上也要一致，所续写短文的词数应为120左右。
【点睛】本文能围绕文章的中心，联系生活，运用想象续写的内容非常生动。所写的内容与原文能保持了连续性和一致性，融为一体。续写的内容中心明确，重点突出，详略得当。故事情节的向后延续发展也非常合乎情理。
续写内容中运用了非谓语中动词的ing形式做状语Refusing to give up, he jumped to his feet and ran as fast as possible; Thinking he would let his sister down, Ali couldn’t help sobbing. Holding the shoes tightly during the award ceremony, Ali felt over joyed and relieved。非谓语中的过去分词作状语Filled with pleasure, Ali walked home quickly。文中还运用了许多的复合句，如由that引导的同位从句...he heard the announcement that he won the third prize as the runner；有whether引导的宾语从句Nervous and anxious, Zahra wondered whether her brother had brought her what she was expecting；由the instant引导的时间状语从句The instant Zahra saw the shoes, her face lit up；和由who引导的定语从句...the runner who collided with Ali was disqualified for breaking the rule等，这些语法结构的运用，使得所续写的部分与原文非常的一致。
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