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书面表达 假定你是李华,你校将组织在校师生本周六去游乐场(amusement park)游玩。

英语作文范文 03-12
书面表达
假定你是李华,你校将组织在校师生本周六去游乐场(amusement park)游玩。请写封邮件邀请外教Bryan同去,内容包括:
1.出发时间、地点;
2.游玩的项目(划船、骑车、喂鱼等);
3.表达期待。
注意:1.词数100左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3.开头和结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。
Dear Bryan,
____________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
范文】Dear Bryan,
I have good news for you. Our school is going to organize a trip to an amusement park this Saturday. It’s my great pleasure to invite you to come along. We will set off at the school gate at eight a.m. this Saturday. We are requested to wait there in advance.
There are many interesting events in this trip. We can try some sporting events, such as rowing, cycling and riding roller coasters. Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices for us, which can make us get closer to nature.
I’m looking forward to your arrival and hope we can have fun together.
Yours,
Li Hua

【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文, 写一封邀请信。
【详解】第一步:
审题: 邀请信
人称:第一、三人称 
时态: 一般现在时、一般将来时
结构: 总分法,分三部分,第一部分说明写信原因,第二部分说明活动安排,
第三部分表达期待。
要点:
1.说明写信原因:邀请外教Bryan本周六去游乐场游玩
2.具体的活动安排
①出发时间、地点:本周六上午8点学校门口集合 
②游玩项目安排:划船、骑车、乘坐过山车、赏花、喂鱼
3.期待Byran的到来 ,希望玩得高兴
第二步:列提纲(重点词汇、短语  )
organize a trip;pleasure; invite sb. to;set off; request sb. to do …;in advance;interesting;sporting event;such as;appreciate;make sb.do …; get close to nature;arrival; have fun
第三步:连词成句
(1)Our school is going to organize a trip to an amusement park.
(2)It’s my great pleasure to invite you to come along.
(3)We will set off at the school gate at eight a.m. this Saturday.
(4)We are requested to wait there in advance.
(5)There are many interesting events in this trip. We can try some sporting events, such as rowing, cycling and riding roller coasters.
(6)Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices.
(7)It can make us get closer to nature.
 
根据提示和关键词进行遣词造句,适当地运用句型,注意时态和主谓一致问题。
第四步:连句成篇(衔接词、亮点词汇)
用多种方式表达“学校将要组织去游乐场游玩”
(1)Our school is going to organize a trip to an amusement park.
→Our school will organize a trip to an amusement park.
→Our school is to organize a trip to an amusement park.
→Our school is scheduled to organize a trip to an amusement park.
 
用it 做形式主语表达下面的句子
(6)Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices.
→It will be good choices to appreciate some rare flowers in the winter and feed the fish in the pond.
 用定语从句连接下面两个句子
(6)Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices.
(7)It can make us get closer to nature.
→Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices,which can make us get closer to nature.
 
适当地运用高级词汇、多变句式提升文章的档次 ,增加文章的可读性。
【点睛】范文要点全面,结构清晰,层次分明,上下文连贯,在表达时用到了很多高级词汇,如 organize a trip组织一次旅行;pleasure愉快;invite sb. to邀请某人去…;set off出发; request sb. to do要求某人做 …;in advance提前;interesting有趣的;sporting event体育活动;such as例如;appreciate欣赏;make sb.do …使某人做…; get close to nature亲近大自然;arrival到达;have fun玩得高兴等;复杂句式的运用提升了文章层次,如it做形式主语的句式 It’s my great pleasure to invite you to come along;被动语态的运用,使句式多变We are requested to wait there in advance;非限制性定语从句的运用Appreciating some rare flowers in the winter and feeding the fish in the pond are good choices for us, which can make us get closer to nature等。
 
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