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阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段内容,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数为150左右。 Bales left the pavement of Base Road and stepped

英语作文范文 07-25

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Bales faced a dilemma about whether to follow the tracks or not. If she chose to follow the tracks, she’d add time and risk to her hiking. But the tracks ahead suggested someone might be in danger. She couldn’t let this go. She called out into the frozen fog, “Is anybody out there? Do you need help?” The strong winds carried her voice away. Then she walked cautiously in the direction of the tracks. She rounded a corner and spotted a man sitting motionlessly.
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Her searching now turned into rescuing the man. She approached him instantly and found he was suffering from frostbite on his feet. Without any hesitation, she covered his body with warm clothes, and then poured him some sugary drink. The wind roared over and they would die soon if they didn’t get out of there. She supported the man and inched along the trail. With great efforts, Bales managed to save the man’s life. Exhausted, she felt that it was all worth it.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达考查读后续写。
【详解】1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:通过文章描述可知,Bales是一个很有经验的远足者。她计划在新罕布什尔州的华盛顿山州立公园徒步旅行6个小时。当她穿过白雪覆盖的山脊向华盛顿山走去时,突然,她注意到一件事:她前面的雪地上有一串脚印,是一双运动鞋留下的——通常不适合徒步旅行。狂风呼啸着袭击她的背部和左侧,她决定放弃她的计划。然而,唯一能让她坚持下去的是雪地上的运动鞋留下的痕迹。
2.续写部分和前面的文章要衔接得当,并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致,故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。
3.根据第一段首句Bales faced a dilemma about whether to follow the tracks or not.( Bales面临着是否跟随这些足迹的两难境地)及第二段首句Her searching now turned into rescuing the man.(她的搜寻现在变成了营救那个人),第一段可以描写Bales面临两难境地时的思想斗争和最终确定去搜寻那个人。第二段则可以描述Bales搜寻到了那个人,那个人应该身处困境,所以她对他展开了营救。
4.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作,考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化,适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇,以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰,要点全面,表达流畅,切合题干要求,句子结构准确,适当补充信息,使篇章结构连贯。
【点睛】范文内容完整,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式,如条件状语从句If she chose to follow the tracks, she’d add time and risk to her hiking.非谓语动词She rounded a corner and spotted a man sitting motionlessly.形容词做状语Exhausted, she felt that it was all worth it.全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外,文章思路清晰、层次分明,上下句转换自然,为文章增色添彩。



 
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