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请阅读下面内容, 按照要求写一封书信。Despite being asked to stay safe during the outbreak(爆发) of the novel coronavirus

英语作文范文 07-21

本篇书面表达属于读写任务,要求考生写一封汇报,说明今年寒假期间的网络课程学习情况。
【详解】第一步:审题
体裁:应用文
时态:根据提示,时态应为一般现在时和一般过去时。
结构:总分法
总分法指先点出写信目的,再逐点进行汇报。
要求
1.写信目的
2.网课期间自己和同学的表现
3.父母对自己学习的关心
4.自己的感受
第二步:列提纲 (重点词组)
log onto,online lessons,be active in, pay little attention to, busy doing sth, under pressure, distract, back to normal, effective, face-to-face lessons, national college entrance examination, consequence
第三步:连词成句
1. I got up at seven and logged onto DingTalk to attend online lessons
2. I was active in communicating with teachers…
3. Some of my classmates, though, paid little attention to courses, busy chatting…
4. My parents were under pressure as they wanted to monitor me at home to ensure I was not distracted by games while attending online classes.
5. their life is back to normal…
6. Online courses are as effective as face-to-face lessons at school.
7. since the national college entrance examination, determining which university I can attend, may have lifelong consequences
根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步:连句成篇(衔接词)
1.表文章结构顺序:First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2.表并列补充关系:What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,
3.表转折对比关系:However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that… 
4.表因果关系:Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰,
第五步:润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整,要点全面,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句,如:I was active in communicating with teachers, for they couldn’t see me online.这句话运用了for引导的原因状语从句;My parents were under pressure as they wanted to monitor me at home to ensure I was not distracted by games while attending online classes.使用了as引导的原因状语从句,省略了that的宾语从句,以及while引导的状语从句的省略,还使用了动词不定式作目的状语;For me, every minute of the online courses counts, since the national college entrance examination, determining which university I can attend, may have lifelong consequences.使用了since引导的状语从句,使用了现在分词作状语,运用了which引导的宾语从句。同时,文章使用了一些固定词组也增加了亮点,如be active in,under pressure,back to normal等等等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外,文章思路清晰、层次分明,上下句转换自然,为文章增色添彩。

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