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阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 The Board Meeting (董事会) had come to an end. Bob started to stand up a

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Frank got a sad look on his face and tears welled up in his eyes when he spoke of what happened later that day. “The weather was terribly bad that day. It was not long after that when my dad went to sea and he never came back. It was such a bad day that most of the boats stayed in. But my dad didn’t because he had a big family to feed. People found his boat floating on the sea with its nets half in and half out. He must have got into a strong wind and was trying to save the nets.”
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Tears were running down his cheeks as Frank told us the biggest regret in his life. “Guys, you don’t know what I would give to have my dad give me just one more kiss on the cheek......to feel his rough old face, to smell the ocean on him and to feel his arm around my neck. You don’t know how regret I am! I wish I had been a man then. If I had been a man, I would never have told my dad I was too old for a goodbye kiss.”
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。
【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知,Frank的父亲为了全家的生活而努力出海挣钱,当父亲送Frank到学校跟作者吻别的时候,Frank觉得尴尬,认为自己不是小孩子了不适合再吻别,有一天他告诉父亲自己不需要吻别了,父亲哭了。
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:当Frank说到那天后来发生的事情时,他脸上露出悲伤的表情,眼里涌出泪水……所以本段应该写那天后来发生的事情,即Frank和父亲分开后,父亲发生了什么事,父亲有一大家人要养活,所以即使那天天气恶劣也坚持出海,但是再也没回来。第二段开头是:当Frank告诉我们他人生最大的遗憾时,眼泪顺着脸颊流下来……本段应该写Frank具体讲述自己人生最大的遗憾,即告诉自己父亲不需要吻别,现在觉得有多么遗憾,宁愿当初没有这样做。
续写时要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右,按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:well up,came back,such … that等高级词汇;时间状语从句Frank got a sad look on his face and tears welled up in his eyes when he spoke of what happened later that day. 虚拟语气If I had been a man, I would never have told my dad I was too            old for a goodbye kiss.为短文增色不少。
 
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