关注我们

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为80左右。 A little boy selling magazines for school walked u

英语作文范文 04-09

参考范文一 (Simple version)
Paragraph 1: The boy headed back down to the old man's house with the figurine. He knocked on the door again and the old man opened the door. "Boy, I told you no magazines." "No, sir. But I want to give you a gift." The boy handed him the figurine and the man's face lit up. " This is for you." The old man was amazed. No one had ever given him such a gift and shown him kindness. (63words)
Paragraph 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and meeting people. He and the boy became friends. The boy even brought his dog to visit him . Gradually, he developed the habit of smiling at everyone and showed his precious collections to children actively and warmly. (44words)
参考范文二 (Complex version)
Paragraph 1: The boy headed back down to the old man's house with the figurine. Afraid as he felt, he still knocked on the door, waiting breathlessly. Finally, it opened and out came the old man. Seeing the boy holding a well-wrapped dog figurine, he looked very astonished but still glared at him without a word. Determined to break the ice, the boy gave the old man the gift with a card attached, expressing his care. The old man was so moved by all the boy did that words failed to convey his emotions. “Thank you so much!” he said to the boy gently and kindly. (91words)
Paragraph 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. The neighborhood always found the old man hanging out and smiling at everyone. He showed his precious collections to children actively and warmly. He used to collect figurines in memory of a real live dog which had kept company with him for a long time before it died. But now, he wasn’t drowned in the sorrows and loneliness anymore. He had realized the true spirit of life. (67words)
【解析】
【分析】这是一篇记叙文。文章讲述的是小男孩和一个孤独的收藏老人的故事。在小男孩的感化下,老人走出了自己的家门,渐渐地养成了对每个人微笑的习惯,并积极、热情地向孩子们展示他收藏的珍贵藏品。
【详解】1.第一段给出的首句是The boy headed back down to the old man's house with the figurine.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“他又敲了敲门,老人打开了门。”入手扩展开去,接下来故事应该这样发展:“孩子,我告诉过你不要看杂志。”“不,先生。但我想送你一件礼物。”男孩把雕像递给他,那人的脸亮了起来。“这是给你的。”老人很惊讶。——无论从何角度拓展,需注意该段最后一句“从来没有人给过他这样的礼物,并对他表示友好。”与续写第二段首句呼应。
2.第二段所给首句From that day on something changed inside the old man.这一句呼应前文,紧接着可以从“他迫不及待地想见到他的妹妹,分享这个好消息。”入手续写。接下来故事情节应该是这样发展:他开始走出屋子去见人。他和那个男孩成了朋友。男孩甚至带着他的狗来看望他。渐渐地,他养成了对每个人微笑的习惯,并积极、热情地向孩子们展示他收藏的珍贵藏品。
【点睛】本文是一篇续写。文章结构严谨,续写思路清晰,环环相扣,同时句中使用高级句子。But I want to give you a gift.并列连词表示转折;The old man was amazed.句中使用一般过去时态的被动语态;He started coming out of the house and meeting people.句中动名词作宾语;He used to collect figurines in memory of a real live dog which had kept company with him for a long time before it died.定语从句和时间状语从句用在句中。
 
喜欢发布评论
留言与评论(共有 0 条评论)
   
验证码: