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阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 It was January 24th. I had finally completed my last radiation treatm

英语作文范文 04-12

Para 1:
As I stepped inside, I was struck by how quiet and how pink it was. There in front of me quietly stood seventeen nine-year-old players decorated head to toe in pink, and breast cancer symbols were painted on their helmets. They looked like fighters, brave and faithful, who were ready for a serious battle. Then my son Brady came over to me, saying, “We are so grateful that you have shown us through your fight what it really means to be a Tiger. Tonight, we are going to win the game just for you.” Inspired by what Brady said, all the players cheered, “It’s time Tigers!” (92 words)
Para 2:
I sensed their determination. They stepped into the field confidently. During the whole game, each and every boy performed so wonderfully, skating swiftly and passing balls skillfully. They had never been so cooperative. Even when they fell behind by several points, they didn’t lose heart. Instead, they kept fighting together. I suppose they knew I was there for them all the time! And I should also tell them how grateful I was that they were there for me. Of course, the Tiger won the game that night. And I won mine, too.  (91 words)
【解析】
【分析】本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者患有乳腺癌,在八个月的治疗过程中,她与病魔顽强抗争,最终康复。从医院回到家后,三个孩子热情的迎接她并拥抱她,儿子Brady邀请她去看他的冰球比赛,她答应了。在比赛当天,更衣室外面聚集着很多父母,比赛开始前,教练邀请作者及其他父母进入更衣室。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“当我走进去的时候,我被房间里的安静和粉红色所震撼。”可知,第一段可描写接下来房间里发生的事情,粉红色代表着什么以及儿子对我说的话。
②由第二段首句内容“我感觉到他们的决心。”可知,第二段可描写孩子们在赛场上的表现以及作者看完比赛后的感悟。
2.续写线索:粉红色——儿子的话——孩子们的决心——赛场表现——赢得比赛——我的感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.坚持做:keep doing / insist on doing
②.为……做好准备:be ready for / get ready for / prepare for
情绪类
①.勇敢的:brave / courageous
②.感激的:grateful / thankful
【点睛】[高分句型1]. They looked like fighters, brave and faithful, who were ready for a serious battle. (由关系代词who引导的非限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]. Even when they fell behind by several points, they didn’t lose heart. (由when引导时间状语从句)
 
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