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书面表达假定你是李华,于2019年3月2日搭乘某航空公司航班(Flight HZH9211)回国。到机场后,你发现遗失了行李箱。

英语作文范文 07-16

本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写一封信给某航空公司,告知航空公司你在机场遗失了行李箱,请航空公司帮你找回。
【详解】第一步:审题
体裁:应用文
时态:根据提示,时态应为一般现在时
结构:总分法
     总分法指把主题句作为总说,把支持句作为分说,并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求:1. 陈述写信原因;
2. 描述行李箱;
3. 期待回复并表示感谢。 
第二步:列提纲 (重点词组)
get lost;ask for sb.’s help;personal files;scientific materials;buy sth. for sb.;hear from sb.
第三步:连词成句
1. I found that my suitcase got lost when I arrived at the airport.  
2 I am therefore writing to asking for your help in finding my suitcase.
3. It contains many important personal files and some scientific materials.
4. There are also some presents that I bought for my family members and friends.
5. I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon.
(根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。)
第四步:连句成篇(衔接词)
1.表文章结构顺序:First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least
2.表并列补充关系:What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also
3.表转折对比关系:However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系:Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
5表换一种方式表达:In other words, that is to say,
6.表进行举例说明:For example; For instance; such as + n/doing
7.表陈述事实:In fact, frankly speaking
8.表选择:either…or…,or
连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰。
第五步:润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整,结构严谨,要点全面,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了主从复合句,如I found that my suitcase got lost这句话中用了that引导的宾语从句,如some presents that I bought for my family members and friends这句话中用了that引导的定语从句;使用了非常好的短语,如ask for sb.’s help,personal files,buy sth. for sb.,hear from sb.等,为文章增色不少。全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外,文章思路清晰、层次分明,上下句转换自然,为文章增色添彩。
 
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